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Nowadays many people have access to computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video games. What are the advantages and disadvantages of playing video games for children?

PlayStation has become a growing trend in the modern era. It is widely preferred by some
people
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 who use technology for relaxing
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 of engaging in physical activities. There are multifaceted benefits and drawbacks.
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 essay will examine both sides before reaching a conclusion. One of the main advantages of playing video
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 is that
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 can easily relieve their stress and interact with
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 from different nations.
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, some individuals are introverted and do not
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 with
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, but
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 playing some video
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, they know each other.
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, a recent survey conducted by PUBG in China revealed that 85% of the adults felt more confident and had less workload.
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, electronic
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 affected individuals' modern lifestyles.
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, it reduces the productivity of
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.
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, young stars do not want to engage in physical activities; they have been spending a lot of time in front of the computer, and
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 facing health issues
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 as obesity and sleeping disorders.
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, kids are not able to concentrate on their studies because they are using a computer to play
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.
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, there are several pros of video
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 for kids in terms of learning new skills;
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, the demerits regarding obesity and less concentration can be overlooked.
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, moderation is key to enjoying the benefits
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minimizing
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 the negative effects.

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planning
Plan your essay with two clear ideas: one good point and one bad point, each with a short example.
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Give only facts or ideas about kids and games. Tie each idea to learning or health for the child.
structure
End with a short finish that restates the idea and what is best to do next.
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The essay shows a view of both sides.
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It keeps to the main topic of games and kids.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive skills
  • strategic thinking
  • problem-solving
  • hand-eye coordination
  • fine motor skills
  • aggressive behavior
  • addictive qualities
  • physical activity
  • social isolation
  • interpersonal relationships
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