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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
The table illustrates
on
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personal spending on different items in five different countries, which
is
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are
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Ireland
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, Italy, Spain,
Sweden
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, and
Turkey
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. In 2002 Overview,
Turkey
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 has the highest
consuming
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consumption
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percantge
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percentage
 in foods, drinks, and tobacco,
addition
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in addition
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 to that it
is had
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has
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the
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apply
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lead
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on
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in
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 leisure and
education
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education,
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while
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 Italy
had
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has
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 the highest number of clothing and footwear.
To begin
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 with
foods
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food
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, drinks,and tobacco,
Turkey
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 is
the
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a
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 greater consuming on
this
Linking Words
 one by %32,14
while
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 second was
Ireland
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,
by
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with
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 %28,91
and
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, and
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last
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 one were
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Sweden
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, Sweden
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by
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, by
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 %15,77
,
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.
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 On the other item which clothing and footwear
Italy
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, Italy
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 came first by far,
which
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with
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 got %9,00
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, respictivily
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respictivily
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respectively
.
While
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 the others
has
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have
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 similar numbers (
Turkey
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, Spain, and
Ireland
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) points
btween
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between
 %6,70 to %6,40, but
Sweden
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 came
last
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by
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with
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 %5,40.
Finally
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,
liisure
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leisure
 and education,
were
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where
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Turkey
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 has the best
percantge
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percentage
 by %4,35,
Sweden
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 second with
slight
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a slight
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 change from Italy
which
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, which
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(
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apply
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%3,22, %3,20).
Linking Words
However
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However,
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Ireland
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 came
before
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apply
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last
Linking Words
 by %2,21
percent
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per cent
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, and
last
Linking Words
 one Spain by %1,98.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ireland, sweden, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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