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Look at the features and rank them from the most to the least important when you seek healthcare services. Write your opinion. • availability of appointments • modern facilities • proximity to home • reasonable prices • positive online reviews

Healthcare services are very important for people
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 for that reason, there are a lot of providers who offer different kinds of services. When a person is going to decide the best option, I consider that it is important to consider these points
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it is important to evaluate the availability of appointments because
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 the end, all people are exposed to an emergency when the time or the availability of a specialist is the most important.
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reasonable prices are
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 very important because people need to measure the cost of the service
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 with their own resources.
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positive online reviews are very important
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to analyse the experience of other customers who can offer a preview of the service.
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, Modern facilities and proximity to home are less important aspects because they depend on the comfort and how the enterprise presents itself.

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structure
Add a short intro that shows your view on the order of what to do when you look for care.
organization
Make your ideas short and in a clear list. Give a reason for each point.
language
Use easy words and keep to simple form. Use more linking words like 'and', 'but', 'so', 'then'.
structure
Finish with a small ending that restates your view.
content
Give one or two examples to back each point if you can.
structure
Clear order with First, Second, Third, Last.
vocabulary
Plain words make the read easy to follow.
content
The idea is to rank a few care parts and give reason.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • appointment
  • availability
  • doctor
  • patient
  • care
  • wait
  • time
  • booking
  • book
  • nearby
  • distance
  • price
  • cost
  • affordable
  • value
  • clinic
  • hospital
  • facility
  • modern
  • equipment
  • clean
  • safe
  • review
  • online
  • rating
  • trust
  • choice
  • option
  • insurance
  • treatment
  • service
  • quality
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