The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions in Edinburgh

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions in Edinburgh
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions in Edinburgh
The line charts illustrate the percentage of people visiting Scotland, who visited different attractions Aquarium, the Zoo, the Festival and the castle in 80s to 2010.
Overall
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, the zoo fluctuated throughout the period.
Whereas
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the Festival is relatively stable.
However
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, the castle increased significantly. The aquarium decreased gradually. Aquarium consistently dropped year on year after 1985.
However
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, in
1980
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1980,
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castle started to increase and it reached around 50% people visiting
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in 1995, and
its
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started to decrease to approximately 30% in 2010. The festival was relatively stable in
80s
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the 80s
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, was around 30% sightseers, and in 2010, it was just below 30%.
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the zoo fluctuated throughout the period in 1980, it was approximately 10% of people who visited
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in 2010, it increased to 20% of tourists.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percent
  • tourist
  • attraction
  • Edinburgh
  • Scotland
  • line
  • graph
  • period
  • rise
  • rises
  • increase
  • grows
  • up
  • fall
  • decrease
  • down
  • peak
  • highest
  • lowest
  • more
  • less
  • bigger
  • smaller
  • start
  • end
  • during
  • over
  • time
  • compare
  • compared
  • different
  • same
  • data
  • figure
  • trend
  • overall
  • then
  • next
  • after
  • season
  • event
  • reason
  • cause
  • plan
  • visitors
  • suggest
  • simple
  • clear
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