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The graph below shows UK air pollutants, measured in million tonnes, from three different sources between 1990 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows UK air pollutants, measured in million tonnes, from three different sources between 1990 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart below illustrates the United Kingdom’s air pollutants, measured in
million
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tonnes
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, from three different
sources
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: transport, industry, and households, during the period from 1990 to 2005.
Overall
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,
although
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 the United Kingdom exhibited varying trends in the
sources
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 of
pollution
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 over the period, the total level of air pollutants was the highest of
pollution
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 and showed a sharp decrease,
whereas
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 transport displayed minor fluctuations followed by a gradual decline. In 1990,
industry
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the industry
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 recorded approximately 7.6
million
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tonnes
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.
This
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 figure decreased sharply in 1999, and showed a minor, stable decline again to just around 3.6
million
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, before
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tonnes, before
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 reaching approximately 3.6
million
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tonnes
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 among other factors. Industry’s
pollution
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,
however
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,
although
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 decreasing sharply, remained significant compared to the other two
sources
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. Transport,
on the other hand
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, had the second-highest level among the others. It began with about 5.9
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990, but showed a year-on-year decrease to exactly 2.0
million
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 in 2005, illustrating another decline, similar to
industry
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the industry
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. Total air pollutants started at roughly 15
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990, with minor fluctuations throughout the period, but the
overall
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 trend remained relatively stable with slight variations.
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, households exhibited the lowest rate of
pollution
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 among the three
sources
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, starting at roughly 5
million
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tonnes
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 and finishing at approximately the same level in 2005.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes, sources, pollution with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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