Films and games can be accessed at any time from mobile devices, like smartphones, tablets and laptop computers. Do the advantage of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

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people spend a lot of
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the technology, films and games are much easier now to watch or play, and there
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tons of circumstances about it. But for
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higher than the disadvantages. First of all, movies and video games can be helpful for the person, because
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can reduce the level of
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loneliness
, or even help him to find friends . Furhtermore people could spend thier free
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, since there is lots of free
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in human life and most of them want to make sure that they spend it properly, or simply not to harm themselves or others, because if they has a lot of
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and they do not know how to deal with it, they would think of different
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and espically wrong one. So by providing ideas like
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you have
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the problem.
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there are other
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to do rahter than just fell their free
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, because films and video games can be entertiment for human, basically it can change thier mood and male them happier, and
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what all humans search for and work to earn
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, In addtion to that, films and video game could transform into indstry like we seen at the moment,and be profitable area, and creating jobs for people. In conclusion,
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can be helpful for you and even for others, but be careful when you use it and
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have fun.

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Use link words to show flow: first, also, but, so, finally.
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End with a short close that rest your view.
idea
The idea that phones and games can have good parts.
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