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It is argued that university student should study a full range of subjects, instead of some specific subjects? To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is indisputable that university
student
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,
instead
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 of studying specific subjects, should generally
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that
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they
should
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study
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 a full range of subjects. From my perspective,
i
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 disagree.
Initially
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, students should focus more on
major-specific
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courses
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.
In other words
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, if students only focus on core
courses
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, they will be able to become more specific with the major, they will be able to understand it more and go deeper with it.
Furthermore
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, studying elective
courses
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 will be a reason for the student to be distracted, and maybe waste marks.
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, a lot of my classmates used to get a high GPA in the first year, back when we used to
study
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 only our
major-specific
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courses
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. Now they get a really low GPA , and the particular reason for that
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 is that we started taking general education
courses
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, which is a reason for wasting time and losing marks, and gets us distracted when it comes to studying our
major-specific
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courses
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. Another important aspect is that most of the topics we
study
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 in the elective
courses
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, we can get to learn
them
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everywhere. We can develop them through the pressures that happen around us, team activities and the lack of time.
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 to say, university is a place where you can test your abilities and work on development.
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, university taught me how to be patient, a social worker, a leader , and work under a lack of time, which I did not
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 anywhere. In summary, despite differing viewpoints,
i
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I
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 maintain that
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major-specific
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courses
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 are enough for the student to handle.

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task response
Make your view clear from the start. State your position in the first sentence.
coherence
Use a topic sentence in each paragraph. Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also.
content
Give one strong example for each reason. Use dates or numbers if you can.
task response
Clear view and stance against the idea.
content
Shows personal experience to back points.
coherence
There is some flow between sentences and ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Holistic education
  • Critical thinking
  • Creativity
  • Interdisciplinary skills
  • Adaptability
  • Personal development
  • Academic motivation
  • Cultural awareness
  • Globalized world
  • Engaged learners
  • Well-rounded character
  • Diverse subjects
  • Career preparation
  • Knowledge base
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