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The chart below shows the percentage of population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The chart below shows the percentage of population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
The chart illustrates the consumption of
recommended
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the recommended
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 daily
amount
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 of
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 by men,
women
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 and
children
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 in 2002, 2006 and 2010 in the UK.
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, it is obvious that the proportion of
women
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 eating the recommended
amount
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 is slightly higher than
man
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that of men
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, and
children
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 underconsume
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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. In 2006, more
citizins
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citizens
 of the UK were eating the daily
amount
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 of fruits and
vegetables
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 compared to other years illustrated in the bar chart. That year,
women
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consuming
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consumed
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 the recommended portion of
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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 comprised of 32%, men
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,
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 28% and
children
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,
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16%.
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, in 2002, the less of the population
of
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in
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 the UK were eating the required
amount
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 of
fruit
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 and
vegetables
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,
thus
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 25% of
women
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, 22% of men, and only 11% of
children
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, fruit, vegetables, women, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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