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Writing Samples
Band 1

The best way to cut down crime rate is by building more prisons and giving longer sentences. do you agree or disagree?

Building more prisons and giving longer prison sentences is the most effective way to reduce crime rates. I agree with that statement
including
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, including
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 other factors,
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. Punishing
criminals
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 with longer prison sentences is a beneficial way to reduce the amount of crime.
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, if the government punishes
criminals
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 with longer imprisonment,
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 may bring regret to
criminals
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 and prevent other crimes.
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, other
criminals
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 may

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planning
Plan the essay with four clear parts: intro, two body parts, and a close. Say your view in the first line.
planning
Give one or two clear reasons to back your view and add simple examples.
structure
Use small linking words to guide the reader, like also, but, for example.
grammar
Keep sentences short and easy to read. Check grammar if you can.
finish
End with a clear finish that restates your view.
content
The essay gives a direct view.
structure
There are a few linking words to move ideas.
content
The writer starts with a clear claim.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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