Young people are often influenced by their peers. This is called peer group pressure. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Youngsters tend to get influenced by their peers very easily
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they copy each other and follow a similar path, which can be beneficial if they are interacting with the right person or opposite if they get involved in harmful situations.
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, the drawback can be more significant
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the weak decision-making ability of
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group. On the one hand, adopting good habits from their peers can be an advantage if they choose their friends with caution.
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, someone with a healthy lifestyle who is focused on studying, health and good hobbies can encourage others to join group studies to improve their marks or
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the gym
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helps with
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wellbeing
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they can be affected by these habits to live a happier life, and
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, build a favourable future.
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, the benefit can be remarkable if they choose to be around the positive
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.
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, teenagers are easily affected by any behaviour , especially
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attributes , because they are not able to make the right decision at a young age.
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, nowadays, vaping and drugs are being normalised , young individuals don't take the consequences of
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activities into mind, and eventually they find themselves in rehabs, followed up by lost
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opportunities
like high achievements
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school. They want to fit in , so they are willing to do anything if it means they will be considered cool in
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generation.
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issue is most common when a person is in a period where they can't fully comprehend the difference between right and wrong.
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, there is strong support for both terms regarding peer group pressure;
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, through analysing both sides , the disadvantages of getting into life-threatening activities will surely outweigh the advantages mentioned. It is highly recommended that parents pay more attention to their child's connections in order to protect them from unacceptable influences.

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Task response: Start with a clear view on whether the good side or the bad side of peer pressure wins, and keep this view in all paragraphs. Give two strong ideas and one clear example to back them up.
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Coherence and cohesion: Put ideas in clear order. Use simple link words like and, but, also, so, for example. Use one idea per paragraph and end with a short wrap up that repeats your view.
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The essay shows both sides of the topic.
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The conclusion states the final view.
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Examples support the ideas and show effects.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • peer
  • peers
  • group
  • pressure
  • influence
  • positive
  • negative
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • benefit
  • harm
  • choice
  • decision
  • safe
  • risk
  • study
  • work
  • class
  • club
  • team
  • belong
  • trust
  • help
  • advice
  • say no
  • self
  • confidence
  • future
  • model
  • example
  • rule
  • limit
  • agree
  • talk
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