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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the proportion levels of three main
type
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types
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 of energy
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Petroleum
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: Petroleum
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, Coal, and Natural
gas
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 in the United Kingdom between 1981 and 2000.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
Petroleum
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 production fluctuated.
In addition
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, the proportion of Coal declined over the
period
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,
whereas
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 Natural
gas
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 output grew rapidly
in
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at
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 the
end
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 of the
period
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.
According to
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 what is shown,
Petroleum
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 started at 90 in 1981,
it
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which
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 is the lowest level that
Petroleum
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reach
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reached
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. In 1984,
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 production increased
up
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apply
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to 140.
Furturmore
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Furthermore
, in 1987
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,
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Petroleum
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begin
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began
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 to
decresing
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decrease
uintil
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until
 it
reach
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reached
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 100. In 1992,
Petroleum
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 started to
increasing
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increase
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 until the
end
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 of the
period
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. In terms of Coal output started with the highest level
80
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of 80
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,
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apply
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 in 1981. From 1984, Coal
begin
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began
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 to
declining
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decline
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 until it stopped at 40, after that it jumped to 60
,
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apply
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 in 1986.
after
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After
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1986
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1986,
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 it
begin
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began
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 to
decreasing
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decrease
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 until the
end
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 of the
period
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. Another point to consider, the production levels of Natural
gas
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 started at
40
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40,
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 it stayed at 40
,
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apply
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 for 10 years. In 1991, Natural
gas
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it
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apply
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begin
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began
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 to
grewing
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grow
 until the
end
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the
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of the
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period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, gas, period, end with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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