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The charts below show the percentage of time used for different activities in the office in the US in 1980 and 2000. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an nake comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of time used for different activities in the office in the US in 1980 and 2000. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an nake comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate how office
time
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 was allocated to different tasks in 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, the most striking change is that the share of
time
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 devoted to computers rose sharply,
while
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 most traditional activities experienced declines. Looking at major changes, a large proportion of
time
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 was spent on the phone in 1980 (30%), but
this
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 dropped to 17% by 2000. Computers, which accounted for only 2% in 1980, increased dramatically to become the largest category at 30% in 2000.
In addition
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, email emerged as a new task in 2000, representing 8% of office
time
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. Turning to minor changes, the proportion of
time
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 spent on paper documents halved from 20% to 10%,
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 meetings fell significantly from 19% to 6%.
By contrast
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, face-to-face communication (14%) and other activities (15%) remained unchanged over the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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