The table and bar graph below show time spent on leisure and household activities in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and bar graph below show time spent on leisure and household activities in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table and bar graph below show time spent on leisure and household activities in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and the graph
illustrates
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illustrate
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, time spent on vacations and
household
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activites
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activities
in Britain, for both
men
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and
women
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by
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, by
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average
minutes
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per
day
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. Overview, on leisure
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men
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, men
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tend to be more active
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while
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, while
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in
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household
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the household
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working
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, working
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women
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are more
pusy
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busy
compare
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compared
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to
men
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with
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. with
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significant numbers, look
for
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example
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example,
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in cooking and washing
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women
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, women
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are higher than
men
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, respectiviely
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respectiviely
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respectively
,
although
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men
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are higher than in
lesiure
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leisure
with small numbers.
Firstly
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, leisure in TV, video, and radio
men
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spend 137
minutes
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while
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women
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118
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spend 118
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, but in
reading
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reading,
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girls spend more time
just
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, just
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by one
mitunes
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minute
(18 for
women
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and 18 for
men
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).
Then
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sport
which
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, which
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the boys had
it
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apply
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as well
by
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, by
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15
minutes
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per
day
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compare
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compared
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to the
women
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which
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, which
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they were 11
minutes
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. Next
household
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work,
frist
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first
cooking and washing were the girls
has
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had
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impresive
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impressive
numbers by around 70
mintues
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minutes
while
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the
men
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were only around 30
minutes
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per
day
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,
huge
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a huge
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different
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difference
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between them. After
that is
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shooping
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shopping
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also
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, also
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the ladies
has
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have
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take
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taken
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the lead by less than 40
mintues
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minutes
,
compare
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compared
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to
men
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were
they
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apply
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over 20
minutes
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,
then
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repair
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repairing
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this
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is the only thing that
men
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were
than
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better than
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the
women
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in
household
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activites
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activities
, with almost 20
while
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ladies were around 10
minutes
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.
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Finally
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Finally,
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clothes washing and ironing, here
agian
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again
girls were higher with
significant
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a significant
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amount around 30 for them
while
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men
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were 10
minutes
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per
day
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words household, men, women, minutes, day with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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