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The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007

The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007
The maps illustrate changes
of
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in
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seaside
Correct article usage
the seaside
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 town named
Petland
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, between the years of 1950 and 2007.
Overall
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,
infrastructure
Correct article usage
the infrastructure
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 of the city
developed
Verb problem
has developed
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 over the
57
Correct word choice
past 57
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 years.
In contrast
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, there were no houses or places for leisure activities in 1950. In 1950, the place only had a main crossroad in the middle of the town. Grassland was located in the
south east
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southeast
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, and
top
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on top
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 of the grass are there was a car park area. There was
sea
Correct article usage
a sea
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 in the north of the
Petland
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, and
in
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on
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 the
north
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north-west
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west
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 side of the
road
Add a comma
road,
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 there was an area for industry. In 2007, the
Petland
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 turned into an urban city. 10 houses
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 built in the grassland, and 3
aparments
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apartments
 in the
north east
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northeast
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.
Car
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The car
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 park
repositioned
Verb problem
was repositioned
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 from the east side of the city to the
north
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north-west
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west
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 part of the
roads
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road
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. Totally 14 shop
centers
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centres
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created
Verb problem
were created
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 across the crossroads.
In
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On
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 the
west
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 side of the
Petland
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, new buildings
constructed
Verb problem
have been constructed
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Linking Words
such
Punctuation problem
, such
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 as
cinema
Correct article usage
a cinema
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 in the
south
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southwest
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west
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 , and a swimming pool and a park located in the
north
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northwest
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west
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.
However
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, the main change showed in roads,
new
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a new
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 road design added
circular
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a circular
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one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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road that goes around the yacht marina
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 used to be
sea
Correct article usage
the sea
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petland, west with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • coast
  • beach
  • town
  • harbor
  • road
  • house
  • houses
  • shop
  • shops
  • park
  • field
  • farm
  • water
  • map
  • year
  • grow
  • build
  • built
  • change
  • expand
  • develop
  • replace
  • new
  • old
  • more
  • less
  • along
  • near
  • center
  • edge
  • fishing
  • tourists
  • people
  • area
  • land
  • sea
  • bay
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