Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society?

Water
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pollution has
became
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one of the main
concering
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concerning
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the
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isuue
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issue
is rising each year, and it's leaving species with poor
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quality to drink, or in some cases
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to death. The
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is significantly connected to the factory emissions and
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throwed
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thrown
by people.
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problem is mainly related to the industries that release their emissions to the
water
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wastes dumped by humans. Companies
cause
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lots
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of
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pollution to rivers by being irresponsible toward their
productions
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production
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and operations.
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, non eco-friendly factories
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that produce skin
cares
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tend to release the spoiled and useless leftovers
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water
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, leading to
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the death
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of marine creatures.
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, individuals are to blame, because they leave plastics and cans in the
water
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rather than bin. Plastic will not get absorbed and
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for thousands of years,
effecting
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sea creatures. A clean place to live will enhance the quality of life
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however
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, marine animals are struggling with
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fact. The amount of dirt will shorten their life span, decrease their health, and at some point
leads
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lead
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to their death.
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, a picture of a dead turtle has gone viral for being stuck on a bottle of
water
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.
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, the population of
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this
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creatures will drop, leading to
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the risk
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of extinction.
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can
also
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affect human basic needs as well, people living in rural areas in
under developed
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countries
doesn't
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has
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access to
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clean
water
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, so they are forced to drink from other sources
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such
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as
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rivers. Iran is one of the countries
that is
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fighting
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deficiency
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, in some of the villages, residents can only use lakes or rivers. An unclean drink can
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several diseases and poor health, which adds to the cost of health care as well.
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,
water
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pollution is putting lots of
lifes
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lives
on
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risk
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moreover
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, the main
cause
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of the issue
are
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humans. Corporations need to go green
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society has to be more responsible toward
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the earth
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to decrease
this
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critical problem.

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structure
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cohesion
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content
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strength
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strength
There are some real examples used to support ideas.
strength
There is a clear attempt to connect pollution to life on land and in the sea and to people.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • contamination
  • industrial discharge
  • untreated sewage
  • agricultural runoff
  • pesticides
  • oil spills
  • microplastics
  • eutrophication
  • algal blooms
  • marine dumping
  • bioaccumulation
  • ecosystem
  • biodiversity
  • public health
  • waterborne diseases
  • fishing industry
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental regulations
  • waste management
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