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Band 3

nowadays many peopl choose to be self-emplooyed rather than to work for a compay or organization. Why might this be the case? What would be the disadvantage of being self-employed.

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the
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present , some
people
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 prefer to do their own job
instead
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 of working for a company.
However
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 ,
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self-employement
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self-employment
 has both pros and
throwbacks
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drawbacks
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.
Firstly
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, it is evident that
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self-employement
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self-employment
 offers more freedom to
people
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 since
any
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no
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 one
can't
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can
 tell you what you have to do , so self-employed
people
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 have more control over their work and
offer
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are able
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 to shape their own future
,
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.
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sucess depens entierly
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Success depends entirely
 on your own effort.
Secondly
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self-employement
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self-employment
 provides us with more flexible working hours
which
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, which
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 means that we can spend more time with our family or can make time to
exercice
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exercise
 and devote time to rest
when ever
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whenever
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 we want
so
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, so
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 the
self employed
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self-employed
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people
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 can create their own working hours.
On the other hand
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self-employement
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self-employment
 causes income uncertainty
;
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,
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 especially in the early stages of their
bussines
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business
and
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, and
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this
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 situation puts stress on
people
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 for their future
also
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 fosters a sense of
insecurity
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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 self-employed workers may not have access to health insurance or paid leave.
For example
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 , if any
uber
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Uber
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 courier
have
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has
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 an accident , they have to pay their medical treatment cost
which
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, which
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 is very expensive. In conclusion , we could say
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however
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that
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self-employement
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self-employment
 provides good
opportunitys
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opportunities
although
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brings
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it brings
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 significant risks
so
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, so
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 before
planing
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planning
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 your
bussines
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business
carrier
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career
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.
you
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You
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 must think about it more carefully

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coherence
Use clear link words to join ideas. For example: first, second, and finally, but, also.
grammar spelling
Check word form and spelling. Examples: self-employment, business, plan.
grammar
Watch small errors in sentences. For instance, 'any one' should be 'anyone'; 'depends' should be 'depends'.
content
Balance points well. Show both good and bad points in equal depth.
structure
Write a short, clear conclusion that directly answers the question.
content
The essay shows both good and bad points of self-employment.
example
There is a real example (Uber driver) that supports a point.
structure
There is a clear closing sentence.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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