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The given line chart depicts the number of students who studied in universities abroad from 3 countries The US The UK and Australia over a period of 5 years from 2002 through 2007.

The given line chart depicts the number of students who studied in universities abroad from 3 countries The US The UK and Australia over a period of 5 years from 2002 through 2007.
This
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 graph illustrates information about how
much
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many
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 students studied abroad from 2002 to 2007.
in
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In
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 three countries,
UK
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the UK
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,
Asturalia
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Australia
 and
US
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the US
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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US
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the US
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 has the majority of students who
is
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are
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studied
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studying
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 abroad
through
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during
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the
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this
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period
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period,
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 even when it declines. Another main point is UK increased
through
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during
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 the
period
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.
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while
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While
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Asturalia
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Australia
 did not
showed
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show
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significant
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a significant
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 change from the start even the end of the
period
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. Starting with
US
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the US
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, between 2002 and 2004 decreased respectively.
Then
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, after 2004 increased significantly. After that
from
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, from
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 the
half
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middle
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 of
2005
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2005,
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 raised
slow
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slowly
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 and
about
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apply
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to
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apply
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reached
50000
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about 50000
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 students in 2007 who
is studied
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were studying
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 abroad.
However
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, the UK was different. At the beginning of
2002
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2002,
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 up to
2003
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2003,
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The
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the
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 line remained stable.
in
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In
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 2003 and after it, it showed
drooped
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a drop
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 through the
remaning
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remaining
period
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.
on
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On
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other
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the other
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 hand,
Asturalia
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Australia
 showed
constant
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a constant
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 line but at
the
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apply
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first showed
slow
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a slow
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 raised.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • increase
  • increased
  • increasing
  • rise
  • rose
  • rising
  • grow
  • grew
  • growing
  • up
  • fall
  • fell
  • falling
  • decrease
  • decreased
  • decreasing
  • down
  • upward
  • plateau
  • stable
  • stable
  • trend
  • trends
  • number
  • numbers
  • students
  • US
  • UK
  • Australia
  • country
  • countries
  • paraphrase
  • compare
  • contrast
  • overall
  • year
  • years
  • period
  • describe
  • show
  • patterns
  • growth
  • change
  • year-by-year
  • gradually
  • suddenly
  • significant
  • notable
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