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Writing Samples
Band 4

Men do most of the high-level jobs. Should the company encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women? What is your opinion on that? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

In the paper, Zhang and colleagues sought to unravel the mystery of how the EGFR kinases
becomes
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 active. Their hypothesis is that the isolated
kinases
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kinase
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 domain of EGFR is intrinsically autoinhibited. They suggest that activation comes only when two
kinases domain
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kinase domains
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 form
asymmetrical
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an asymmetrical
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 dimer, much like a CDK awakening when it binds cyclin.
Thus
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, one C-terminal lobe in the pair acts as
‘cyclin-like’
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a ‘cyclin-like’
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 activator for the other.
This
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 resolves a lingering puzzle, as they
say
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” The mechanism by which the epidermal growth factor receptor (EGFR) is activated upon
dimerization
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 has eluded definition”.

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task response
Add your own view on the topic. Say if you think the idea is right or not, and give a short reason.
coherence
Make a simple plan before you write. A line on the plan, a middle part, and a short end line help the reader to see the idea.
coherence
Use simple linking words to join ideas. Words like first, also, but, so, and then help the flow.
content
The main idea of the paper is clear, and a key example is given with the idea of a two-part unit.
language
The sentence uses a compare to a known idea (CDK and cyclin) to explain activation.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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