The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
THE PIE CHART PROVIDE KEY INFORMATION ABOUT TWO MAIN
REASONS
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, WHY PEOPLE TRANSPORT TO ANOTHER COUNRTY
INSTEAD
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OF STAYING AT THE UNITED KINGDOM.
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, IF THEY STAY
AT
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THE
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ENGLAND, WHY DO THEY CHOOSE THAT
.
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ACCORDING TO
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WHAT IS SHOWN IN THE FIRST
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, THE MAJORITY OF PEOPLE LEAVE THE UK FOR THE QUALITY OF LIFE.
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, THE SIGNIFICANT INDIVIDUALS CHOOSE TO STAY IN GREAT BRITAIN FOR FAMILY AND FRIENDS. IN TERMS OF THE
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BEHIND LEAVING THE UK, THE MAIN REASON IS QUALITY OF LIFE, WHICH IS THE HIGHEST PROPORTION IN THE FIRST SKECH. FOLLOWED BY FINANCIAL
REASONS
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BY 24 PER CENT ,
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EMPLOYMENT WITH 18% AND THE
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TWO PERCENTAGES ARE WEATHER AND FAMILY AND FRIENDS WITH 12% AND 9% RESPECTIVELY. WITH REGARD TO WHY PEOPLE CHOOSE TO STAY IN THE UK, THE PEAKS WAS FOR FAMILY AND FRIENDS ,WHICH IS THE OPPOSITE OF THE FIRST TABLE.
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, 21% OF THEM FOR SOCIAL LIFE, FOLLOWED BY AN EQUAL PROPORTION FOR THE FINANCIAL
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AND EMPLOYMENT
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15%. THE
LAST
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PERCENTAGE IS FOR LANGUAGE WITH A MODEST PROPORTION ,WHICH IS 11%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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