It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative or practical subjects for which they may have more apptitute for. To what extent do you agree or disgaree?

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children
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who do not have an artistic talent study painting or drawing in classes at school.
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, they should focus on other creative or practical courses that they have enough skills
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to improve them. Others hold the opposite view.
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I agree that
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should learn as many
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as they
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, because it enhances their skills and knowledge. I
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believe that they have the right to choose the
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that they will study, by doing
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the child will enjoy studying and will work harder to be better. On the one hand, making
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study different courses is important. Nowadays, many schools teach
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many courses on various topics
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as languages, arts, and Physical Education. The purpose of these
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is to let the student decide what he thinks is good
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him.
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,
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should take at least one course in
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to improve their imagination and
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to see
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whether
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field is fun or not. Many parents said that their kids developed hobbies
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school.
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, learning practical
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is as important as learning arts, as it
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gives the child the chance to improve solving
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, and it gives him a sense of challenge which is beneficial to him, since it teaches him
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difficulties and never
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up.
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, when I was a
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prefer studying science. I chose to work on
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to do some videos and posts;
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,
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my communication skills and I can speak without hesitating. In conclusion, I partially agree with the proposal that
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should ignore
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subject and should move to other creative
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, because in my opinion
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a few
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restricts
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one field.

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