The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph and table illustrate
,
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the average temperatures
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in three main cities
which
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, which
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is
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are
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,
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London
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, New
York
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, and
Sydeny
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Sydney
.
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also
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also,
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it
measure
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measures
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the
averge
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average
number of hours of sunrise in the year.
Overall
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, New
York
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has the highest number of sunshine, followed by
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Sydney
which
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, which
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came second with slight
differ
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,
while
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London
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came
last
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by far.
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although
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,
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Sydney has
warmest
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the warmest
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weather
through
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throughout
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a
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the
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whole
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year,
but
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New
York
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and
London
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has
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have
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rappid
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rapid
change
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changes
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throughout 12
months
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.
To begin
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with
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London
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, which
the
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total annual hours of sunshine is 1,180, and
the
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the
heat
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of it can change depending on the
months
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. For
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for instance
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, in winter
the
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, the
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average
temperture
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temperature
are
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is
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around
10c
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10 °C
,
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;
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otherwise
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otherwise,
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the
heat
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keep
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keeps
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increaseing
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increasing
throughout the period until
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it reach
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reach
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reaches
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summer
which
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, which
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had
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the highest
heat
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in
London
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, which is less than
25c
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25 °C
. Before it
fall
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falls
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again in
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Autumn
to be 15 and even 10 in November.
Then
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, New
York
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which
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has the greatest number of hours of sunrise, by 2,535. But, it
tempertures
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temperatures
,
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had small degrees like 5c during
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December
and throughout the winter,
then
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in Spring it can rise to 10c,
while
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in summer it reached the highest amount of
heat
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compare
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compared
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with the others and it can reach 30c in July.
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However
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in
fall
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the fall
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it
start
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starts
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decreases
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to decrease
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again to be from (25c to 10c).
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Finally
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Sydeny
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Sydney
, it is coldest
moths
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months
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is
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are
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June and July
by
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, by
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15c thish the
months
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of winter in Sydney, but the rest
months
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shows
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show
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stable
tempertures
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temperatures
during the year, with 25c most of the time.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, york, months, heat, c with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average
  • temperature
  • sunshine
  • monthly
  • annual
  • comparison
  • characteristics
  • detailed analysis
  • highest
  • lowest
  • examination
  • relationship
  • illustrate
  • patterns
  • rainfall
  • climate
  • considerable variation
  • significantly
  • notable
  • data representation
  • regional differences
  • yearly averages
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