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You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter •Say what the participant liked about the hotel. •Explain why they were unhappy about the hotel. •Suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in the future.

Dear Mr John, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I'm writing to express my feedback regarding our meeting that we had
last
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 week on 19 June in your hotel. First of all, I would
give
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like to express
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 my grateful feelings about the room cleaners, it was really adorable and smells fresh.
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, the meeting room was spacious.
Secondly
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, my team was feel pessimistic a little bit. So I would like to formally complain concern the quality of the Salmon that you presented, it looks old with a bad smell.
Moreover
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, our meeting planner
choose
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 an orange juice for the meal,
we
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but we
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surprised
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were surprised
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 that we found an apple juice.
To sum up
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, I hope you will select
a
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apply
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better food and take the
clients
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 options seriously for future improvements, and
asking
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ask
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 for
thier
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their
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good services. Thank you so much in advance. Best regards, DH Company team

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content
Plan your letter. Start with why you write, then say what was good, what was not good, and what you want done.
structure
Make each paragraph hold one idea only. Use a short intro, one paragraph for good points, one for problems, one for fix, and one for close.
linguistic
Check your word use and form. Use clear tenses and polite tone.
format
Use a polite closing and a formal 'Yours sincerely' style.
greeting and closing
Polite start and end in the letter.
content balance
The writer points out both good and bad parts.
task oriented
A request for action is clear, so the hotel can act.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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