Some people think that teenagers should follow the old generation but others believe that they should challenge the old thoughts. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Today, many
people
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argue about the young
generations
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that
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must learn from the old
people
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. But
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some
people
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think that they don't have to follow what old
generations
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do.
This
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essay will examine both perspectives and explain how the old
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are still relevant to the younger
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generation.
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Firstly
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, many
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think that our young
generations
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have to follow what the older
generation
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does. Because
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the older
generation
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has so much
experience
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more experience
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in life
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than teenagers. We should agree about that, because
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example, our parents have more experience in life than us and
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they already do what we do now. So, there must be
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knowledge that we can get from the older
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.
Secondly
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, some
people
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think that teenagers should let go
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of the
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the
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old
thoughts
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. Because
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the old
thoughts
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are not relevant in
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modern society.
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, in the
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our elders learned everything from books. But
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today we can learn anything by searching
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Google or using AI to be our partner.
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, for young
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people
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people,
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the old way is too conservative to be used in
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era.
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, we should know that the old way is more useful for the older
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. In conclusion, both the young and older
generations
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have their own
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what
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on what
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to do in their life.
However
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, the teenagers have to
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more respect
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for
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the old
thoughts
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and the older
generation
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must realise that the younger
generation
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has their own way too.

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Be clear with your view. State your opinion in the intro and in the last paragraph.
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Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a topic sentence and add one or two small examples.
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Use more linking words to show contrast and flow between ideas.
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Check grammar and fix long or run-on sentences. Use simple, short sentences.
strength
The essay shows an attempt to discuss both sides.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
content
Some good examples are used, such as parents and the use of Google/AI.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • adhere to
  • guidance
  • wisdom
  • societal continuity
  • traditions
  • cultural values
  • life experiences
  • career choices
  • relationships
  • moral dilemmas
  • question
  • challenge
  • conventional wisdom
  • foster innovation
  • status quo
  • societal evolution
  • outdated practices
  • contemporary standards
  • critical thinking
  • adaptability
  • rapidly changing world
  • scrutinizing
  • inclusive
  • equitable
  • efficient systems
  • balanced approach
  • empowered
  • outdated or harmful traditions
  • preservation
  • innovation
  • refining
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