Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Recently, an increasing number of workers have become self-employed
instead
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of working for corporations or public employers. I personally believe that the benefits of
this
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decision far outweigh the drawbacks, and the reasons will be discussed as follows.
Initially
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, self-employed business stimulates the development of the economy , and it is beneficial for both the government and the employee. Because
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could increase the taxable income
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the job opportunities. So, the government has more budget to invest in education or public services, which is beneficial for every resident.
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, the employees have a higher chance of being hired.
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, small businesses contribute to the local economy , which can be found easily in developed cities,
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as Shanghai in China.
Secondly
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, numerous small businesses not only provide job positions, it
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improve productivity and efficiency. The tiny corporation could survive by modifying its products or services more frequently
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the comments from customers.
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flexibility needs efficient management to improve personal productivity and save time on communication.
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, with fewer employees, SpaceX successfully completed the space discovery project but only spent the first tenth of the cost which NASA used to spend.
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, working in a tiny private company brings more advantages
as well as
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challenges to the worker. In conclusion, there are visible benefits for people to start a career in a self-employed small business by improving productivity and efficiency, compared to working in a large company.

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task response
State a clear view in the intro and keep your main stance through the essay.
task response
Balance the view by adding the main drawbacks and then show why your good points win.
coherence
Use linking words to show flow between ideas and make each paragraph have one main idea.
grammar
Fix simple grammar and word form errors to make many sentences clear and easy to read.
examples
Use true, simple examples that fit the point you make and are easy to check.
strength
The essay shows a clear stance and links ideas to the prompt.
structure
It uses order words (Initially, Secondly, In conclusion) to show structure.
content
The main topic is about how self-employ can bring more jobs and power to the economy.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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