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The chart below shows the percentage of households in a European country that had access to the internet between 1999 and 2004.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in a European country that had access to the internet between 1999 and 2004.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the proportion of households with
internet
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 access in urban/suburban and rural areas in a European country over a period of six years, from 1999 to 2004.
It is clear that
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 there has been an upward trend over the period given. Both Urban/suburban and rural families saw a rise in
internet
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 users
with
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 more urban/suburban occupants having more access to
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internet
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the internet
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. In 1999, about 15% of
internet
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 users
constitute
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constituted
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of
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apply
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the
habitats
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inhabitants
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 of the urban region of the country,
while
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 rural
had
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areas had
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 around 2%. After a year, the
amount
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number
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 of individuals with access to
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internet
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the internet
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 doubled. Over the next 4 years,
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internet
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the internet
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 was accessible to approximately 65% of the urban/suburban population and 35% of the rural
people
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population
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at the end
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 of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet with synonyms.
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