A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income.Unfortunately tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly.Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefit of tourism out weight its drawbacks?

It is undeniable that lots of countries around the world depend on
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as a
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some think that
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has many positives, others argue that it comes with several problems if not managed
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essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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phenomenon and present my opinion. On the one hand,
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brings lots of benefits to the visitors and the visited country.
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, travelling to another country and
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more about them can serve
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both sides very well. The host country will be able to show them who they truly are in the most perfect and honest way, through their
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, their manners, and their real behaviours.
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of relying on other sources
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as the media, which lately has been spreading a lot of misconceptions about many countries, especially the Middle East.
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would offer tourists a real and extraordinary experience of the place. To illustrate, they will get to know the customs, traditions, food, culture, history, landscapes and many other interesting things, all of which will
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to them in an authentic, long-lasting experience that they can share with their
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when they go back home.
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is extremely
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, as it would help close
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and nations together, as long as the fear of the unknown
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no longer exists.
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, there could be some
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hosting tourists. It is possible to say that there will be much crowding that may bother the indigenous
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might take
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usual to go to work, or run some errands.
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,
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a trend might lead to
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pollution rate in the city.
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, tourists will use transport to move around the place, and
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carbon emissions will be produced even more.
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would make air pollution rise significantly. In conclusion,
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there are some negatives of
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, I tend to believe that the advantages
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far outweigh the disadvantages.

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task
Make the plan clear in the intro and end. State your view plainly and restate in the end.
coherence
Use one clear topic sentence in each paragraph. Stick to one main idea per paragraph.
grammar
Use simple grammar and check spelling. Fix mistakes with word form and articles.
content
Give more exact examples and explain them so the reader can see the point.
content
The essay shows both good and bad sides.
structure
It uses 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to show structure.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural erosion
  • economic dependency
  • sustainable tourism
  • unregulated
  • local economy
  • job creation
  • income generation
  • pollution
  • natural resources
  • cultural identity
  • tourist influx
  • global pandemics
  • political unrest
  • hospitality sector
  • entertainment industry
  • transportation sector
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