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The graph below shows everage carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows everage carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Nowaday
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Nowadays
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, the problem of air
poluted
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pollution
 have
make
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made
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 people
to
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apply
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have
an
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apply
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headache
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headaches
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 because we don’t know how to solve
that
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this
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problem
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problem,
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while
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the
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apply
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carbon dioxide
increased
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has increased
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 rapidly. The graph below
depict
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depicts
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 the average carbon dioxide (CO2)
emissions
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 per person from 1967 to 2007 in the UK,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal. At first glance, we can say that Italy and
Potugal
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Portugal
 both
increase
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increased
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 from 1967 to 2007. Because of the
increasing
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increase
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of
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in
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 population, the CO2
emissions
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 in metric
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tones
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tons
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 in these two countries rise very fast.
Besides
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, the UK and
Sweden
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 have
decrease
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decreased
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 rapidly. In
Sweden
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, in 1977, the CO2
emissions
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 in metric
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tones
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tons
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is
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were
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 about 10.2, in 1987,
it
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they
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slow
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slowed
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 down
about
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to about
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 7
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tones
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tons
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.
In
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On
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 the other hand, the UK is slowly
downed
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declining
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. Because the age of group teenagers now
don’t
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doesn’t
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 like to have a baby,
so that
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apply
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the population is decreasing slowly. But the two countries
Portugal
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, Portugal
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 and
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Sweden
Punctuation problem
Sweden,
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 have the same
standart
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standard
 of CO2
emissions
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 in metric
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tones
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tons
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. In 2007, there
is
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were
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 about 5.5
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tones
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tons
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 of CO2
releases
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released
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 to the environment. In
sumary
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summary
, in about 40 years, the
emissons
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emissions
 in metric
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tones
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tons
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release
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released
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 to
environment
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the environment
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 all the same a little bit. It’s all decrease and increase
in
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by
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 about 6 or 8
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tones
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tons
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words co, emissions, sweden, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 3 times.
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