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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
The table illustrates information
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 the public aged 65 and above and
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 the difference
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in
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 the percentage in three countries.
Overall
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,
this
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 data is collected from
Canada
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,
Germany
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, and the
UK
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. The populations aged 65 and above are expected to grow
for
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 almost 10
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percent
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 in
Canada
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 and
Germany
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 from 1988 to 2030. Examining the details,
Germany
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 had the most elderly,
which
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who
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was
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 at the age
65
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of 65
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 and above in 1988,
by
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at
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 20.45
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percent
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.
Canada
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 and the
UK
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 were 16.32 and 14.23
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percent
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, respectively.
Subsequently
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, the proportion of the residents in
Canada
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 who were 65 years old and above grew to 20.67
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percent
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 in 2000.
Germany
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 had experienced a similar pattern with
Canada
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,
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 its figure was 25.32
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percent
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.
However
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, the population of
elderly
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the elderly
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who
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apply
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aged more than 65 and including
the
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those
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 aged 65
slightly
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, slightly
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 grew to 14.89
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percent
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, only 0.66
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percent
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 difference from the figure in 1988. In 2030, the
UK
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 is expected to experience
a
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more advancement
on
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in
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 the population group, it might grow to 20.35
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percent
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 in 2030, an around 6
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percent
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per cent
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growing
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 prediction.
In contrast
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 to the
UK
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,
Canada
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 and
Germany
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 are both predicted by approximately 5
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percent
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 growth in 2030. These two countries won’t
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expect
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for
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apply
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more acceleration of the population aged 65 and above from 2000 to 2030.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, germany, uk, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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