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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exporte to four countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exporte to four countries from 1990 to 2012
The chart below gives us information about the percentage of
Austrailan
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Australian
 exports to some countries during the given period (1990-2012)
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, Japan experienced the biggest
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 followed by
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the US
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 and India
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that
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which
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 remained somewhat stable, with the exception of
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China,
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that
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which
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 experienced the highest increase
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throughout
 these years.
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1990
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1990,
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 Japan was at
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25% being the highest export rate
counrty
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country
 at the time, followed by the
US
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US,
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that
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which
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 was at 12%. During the
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period
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 Japan suffered a
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decline
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 to 18%
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 the US
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fell to 6%. Looking at the other part of the
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 we can see that China and India were the lowest export rate regions in the 1990s
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 at 4% and 2% respectively.
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However
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at
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 the ultimate
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 China experienced the biggest rise
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 up to 27%
while
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 India had a slight growth to 5%.

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