The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compasions where relevant. Wirte at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the amount of fish and other
meats
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that were consumed by people in Europe from the year 1979 to 2004 .
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Overall
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Overall,
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it can be noted that Beef was consumed in
higher
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a higher
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proportion than other
meats
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at the beginning of the time period
which
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, which
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declined
further
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. A similar trend was observed in the consumption of Lamb and Chicken.
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Conversely
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Conversely,
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the preference for fish saw a rapid growth between 1979 and 2004. In the year 1979 , Beef was consumed in
a
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apply
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greater
quantity
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quantities
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compared to other
meats
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. Europeans ate more than 200
grams
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per
week
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in that time period;
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however
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however,
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the figure dropped to 100
grams
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per
week
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in 2004.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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the consumption of fish rose from 150
in
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grams in
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1979 to almost 250
grams
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per
week
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in 2004
showing
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, showing
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a dramatic increase
of
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apply
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all. In terms of Lamb and Chicken, both were
less eaten
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eaten less
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than
other
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the other
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two
meats
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.
While
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lamb saw a rapid drop in figures from 150
grams
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per
week
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( 1979) to less than 100 ( 2004). The
porportion
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proportion
of chicken that
consumed
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was consumed
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throughout the years was fairly stable, which was almost equal to 50
grams
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per
week
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words meats, grams, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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