The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.Thetable shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.Thetable shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.Thetable shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The bar chart depicts one nation's
exports
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export
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data
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in 5 categories from 2015 to 2016. The table illustrates the change by proportion in each category in the given period. On the whole, it is apparent that the former for petroleum products took the lead
,
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however
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the lowest position belonged to
textiles's
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textiles'
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data
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.
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, the figure for gems and jewellery witnessed a slight decline,
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that for the others saw a reverse trend. In 2015, there were around 60
billion
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tons
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of petroleum goods exported, standing at the highest point.
This
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data
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also
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doubled that for both agriculture and textiles, in which the latter was the lowest. Meanwhile, the former for engineered goods and gems and jewellery were nearly 60
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billion and
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above 40
billion
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tons
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respectively. After one year,
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country imported nearly 70
billion
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tons
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of petroleum products, which was still the highest amount
exported
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imported
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after experiencing an increase
to
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of
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3%. At the same time, the amount of that for
textile
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textiles
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doubled
up
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, sharing the same
data
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with agricultural products at nearly 40
billion
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tons
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.
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the former for gems and jewellery went down by over 5%, that for engineered goods minimally went up by above 8%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words data, billion, tons with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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