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The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.

The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.
The pie graphs illustrate the proportion of energy production by fuel source in France between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, nuclear power increased significantly during the period,
while
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 all other sources of energy experienced a decline. In 1990, Natural Gas was nearly a quarter,
as well as
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 Coal, with nearly 28%, respectively,
whereas
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 Oil was roughly 22%. Hydropower was the lowest source in France at approximately 6%,
while
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 Nuclear power was just around 17%. By 2010, Nuclear power showed a significant increase from 17% to 67%, becoming the biggest source of electricity. All other sources displayed a dramatic decline;
for instance
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, Natural Gas fell to 4% from 28%, Coal decreased to just around 13%, and Oil
became
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fell
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 13%. Hydropower still maintained its level at 2%
overall
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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