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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some person think that a person improves intellectual skills better when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are some tasks and projects
demand
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that demand
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team
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the team
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 to
work
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 on
it
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them
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. Some people
are thinking
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think
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the
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that
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team
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 activities improve the skills on person and others think it does not matter. In my
prespactive
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perspective
, it
is depend
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depends
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 on what
i
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I
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work
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 on
it
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apply
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. First of all, if we want to make a big event, we will make a
groups
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group
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 of
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team
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teams
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 to do a great job.
For instance
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,
i
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I
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 had experience and
i
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I
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 worked on
event
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an event
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 when
i
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I
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 was
on
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in
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unviersty
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university
. We make a lot of groups, like
:
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apply
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finance , logistics
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also
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, also
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 oppressions.
At the
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end
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end,
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 all of us had
own
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our own
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 experience and learned from
others
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other
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 people who
is
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have
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 worked with it.
In addition
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, all of us should know how to
work
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 with
other
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others
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. Even if you don't like to do that. On
other
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the other
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 hand, if
i
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I
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 have
project
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a project
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 on
subject
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a subject
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 ,
i
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I
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 would
work
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 on it alone. Because there is
deadline
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a deadline
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 so we must submit on
the
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apply
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time without any errors .
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Also
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Also,
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 I do not want someone
struggling
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to tell
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 me
on
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about
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 my
work
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 and impact in our band.
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Also
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Also,
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 there are some students
depend
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who depend
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 on
other
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others
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, which
it
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makes it
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 hard for the
team
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.
Also
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, some teachers can't do anything for the
team
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 because they think it is
oppressiv
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oppressive
. As a final thought,
the
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apply
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team
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teamwork
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work
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 gives you
good
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a good
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 experience
and
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, and
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every one
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everyone
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 should learn to cooperate with others.
Also
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, in some
situations
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situations,
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work
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working
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 alone
better
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is better
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 to save time and energy.

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task response
Plan a quick outline before you write. State your view in the intro and stick to it in the body.
cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas. Use 'and', 'but', 'for example', 'in addition' to show how ideas are linked.
grammar
Improve grammar and spelling. Practice present tense and subject-verb agreement.
examples
Give one clear example for each idea. Explain why it helps your point.
closing
End with a short verdict that restates your view.
content
There is a basic idea of teamwork and its use in events.
content
Some good examples of group work are given.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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