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Modern form of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their frieds. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
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 argue that emails and messages have reduced opportunities
of meeting
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to meet
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friends
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, and that has a negative impact
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on
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people
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. I completely agree with
this
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statment
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statement
 and I believe that modern ways of
communications
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communication
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 have more drawbacks than benefits. In recent years, the rapid development of technology and changing lifestyles have contributed to changing our ways of
communications
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communication
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. It is true that
people
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 can easily contact
people
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 through
smart phones
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smartphones
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and
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, and
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 nowadays
people
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 even email each other in the same office or at home. Modern technologies enable
people
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 to express their feelings and
sharing
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share
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 their thoughts regardless of
time
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 and location, not only
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with sentences
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 but
also
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 with pictures and
catoon
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cartoon
 characters.
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, many individuals tend to consider that
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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communication
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 is
waste
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a waste
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 of
time
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 or even stressful.
Recent
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A recent
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 study shows that 82
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 feel that they spend less
time
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 with their
friends
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compare
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compared
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 to a decade ago.
Moreover
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,
it is clear that
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 social media contributed
creating
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to creating
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 less chance of meeting
with
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apply
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people
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.
For example
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, it made it possible to know the details of your
friends
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 living in different countries,
such
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 as where they go, what they eat, what they buy, and so on
through
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, through
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instagram
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Instagram
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.
Conseqently
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Consequently
, particularly young generations tend to think that there is no need to see each other because they feel like they know well.
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, I am afraid that
people
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 are going to lose important skills
such
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 as
communication
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,
team
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teamwork
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 work and critical thinking in the future. I
beleive
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believe
 that individuals should reconsider
a
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the
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 way of
using
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use
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 technologies and spend more
time
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 meeting and discussing with
friends
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 and family. In conclusion, I strongly believe that a
wide
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widespread
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spread
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use
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 of
smart phones
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smartphones
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have
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has
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 negative consequences in terms of
communication
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. It is easy to contact
people
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 by
emails
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email
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 and messages
and
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, and
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people
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 know about each other through social media;
however
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, it is
necessay
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necessary
 to realise that
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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communication
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 plays
crucial
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a crucial
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 role in enhancing
people
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's interaction skills.

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accuracy
Make your view clear from the start and finish with a short restatement. Do not use fake or uncertain facts. Stick to true and simple ideas that link to your point.
structure
Use one strong idea per paragraph and a clear topic sentence. Then add a sentence that explains it.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, but, for example, therefore.
language
Check spelling and grammar and avoid big errors that slow reading.
content
The writer shows a clear view and ends with a conclusion.
structure
There is a basic order of paragraphs which helps reader follow the argument.
content
Some good examples are used to back up ideas (e.g., Instagram)

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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