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nowadays, people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurant. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

Today I will discuss that nowadays,
people
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waste
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 a lot of
food
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 that was bought from shops and
restaurant
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restaurants
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.
First,
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some
people
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 like to see the
food
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 more and like to eat a lot.
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Also
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people
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 feel
lazy too
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too lazy
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cook
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to cook
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 at home.
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Moreover
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 the product
it
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apply
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is not available at the house. So at the
party
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party,
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 they bring a lot of
food
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 and they
waste
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 the
food
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. If we want to less the
waste
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 of
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food
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food,
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 we should to
less
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fewer
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party's
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parties
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 or to less the
people
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 in the party.
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Moreover
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 we should
to
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apply
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practice
the
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apply
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cooking at home to avoid the
waste
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 of
food
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.

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structure
Make a plan: write an intro, 2-3 big ideas in the body, and a short ending.
grammar
Fix common grammar problems: 'to less the waste' -> 'to cut waste', 'party's' -> 'parties', 'at the house' -> 'at home'.
coherence
Use one idea per sentence and link ideas with simple words like and, but, also, then.
task response
The essay shows a plan to talk about waste and a way to cut it.
flow
There are some reasons and a simple idea to cut waste.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food waste
  • overbuying
  • portion sizes
  • expiration dates
  • meal planning
  • food preservation
  • cultural norms
  • social norms
  • storage techniques
  • distribution systems
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