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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people think it is the government’s responsibility to tackle environmental issues. Others believe it is up to each individual to be environmentally responsible. Discuss both sides

It is often thought that the
government
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 should be responsible
to fix
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for fixing
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 environmental problems,
wheras
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whereas
 others argue that it is up to each citizen to be environmentally aware.
This
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 essay will discuss both perspectives before expressing my own view that the
government
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 should spread
the
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apply
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envrionemtal
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environmental
 awareness
amoung
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among
people
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. On the one hand, some
people
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 think that since they are working in their fields, they should put their efforts only
to
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into
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 their work, letting the
environemtal
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environmental
 issues
to
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apply
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be solved by the
government
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.
In addition
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, they claim that
the
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they
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 do not know how to act if
such
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 an accident
is happened
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happens
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.
For instance
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, in Al-Baha city, there was a fire in a farm
and
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, and
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 the locals did not try to do anything, claiming that they might lose their lives; after that, they waited for the firefighters to come.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 have a sense of responsibility and they
passionate
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are passionate
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to experience
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about experiencing
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 adventures;
thus
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, they think that everybody should know how to
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respond
 if something
occurred
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occurs
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, claiming that the
governemnt
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government
do
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does
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 not have enough
workforces
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workforce
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 to handle every environmental threat.
Furthermore
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, by doing
this
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, they will reduce the number of injuries and
deathes
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deaths
.
For example
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, if something happened in a rural area,
the
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they
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 will
able
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be able
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 to save their lives. From my perspective, I think that the
governemt
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government
 should teach
people
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 what to do if an environmental issue
happened
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happens
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 and how to evacuate quickly.
the
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The
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governement
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government
 should make a campaign to ensure that
people
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 know the emergency numbers. In conclusion, some
people
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 believe that the
government
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 should tackle issues alone, others think that individuals should
responde
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respond
 immediately.
However
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, I think that the
governemt
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government
 rule is to make
people
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 aware by teaching them the steps of
actting
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acting
.

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task
Plan your essay with a clear view in the first paragraph and keep one idea per sentence.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are linked and to move from one idea to the next.
grammar
Check spell and grammar so your meaning is clear.
development
Give more strong examples and explain them.
structure
You state a view at the end and wobble a bit with both sides.
content
You try to give a real example to support your idea.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental responsibility
  • Regulations
  • Emissions
  • Deforestation
  • Waste management
  • Renewable energy
  • Public transportation
  • Collective impact
  • Sustainable practices
  • Advocacy
  • Synergistically
  • Compliance
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