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The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.

The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.
The line chart illustrates the
number
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 of students from three different countries (the UK, the US, and Australia) who
were
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studied abroad from 2002 to 2007.
Overall
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,
while
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 the UK student numbers experienced a decline over the
period
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 shown, the US showed some fluctuations. Notably, the
number
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 of Australian students remained unchanged over the
period
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. In 2002, the US recorded about 50,000 pupils, compared to the UK
only
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 30,000 and 10,000 for Australia. The
number
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 of students who studied in other countries from the US dropped to 45000 by 2004, before recovering gradually to 50,000 again in the final year.
American
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America
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 had the highest figure across the
period
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. In comparison, the US witnessed a consistent decrease, falling from 30,000 in 2002 reached just over 20,000 in 2007.
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Australian’s
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Australians
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number
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 made up 10,000 people over the
six - years
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six-year
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period
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. The lowest point among all three nations.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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