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Band 5.5

Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people' sa laries to pay for public services such as roads and schools. Other thinks high taxes are bad. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many
people
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 feel that
taxes
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 are essential for the
overall
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 development of the country,
while
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 others tend to argue the opposite
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 they think
taxes
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 are not allocated correctly, and the capital that they provide to the
government
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 does not change much. In my opinion,
taxes
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 are necessary for
nation's
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 progress, but the authority should ensure they show the citizens that the capital they provide is being spent wisely. It is generally considered that the more money the
government
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 receives, the better life
people
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 in the country will have.
Taxes
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 are meant to develop living conditions by building roads, improving the environment, creating jobs, and supporting the elderly with pensions.
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, in the Netherlands, where the tax rate is over 50%, living standards are very high, and citizens are happy to pay because their salaries are large enough. The
government
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 allocates a big part of tax money to working conditions, so even minimum-wage jobs provide a comfortable life.
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,
people
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 in some countries think the
government
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 is not using their money
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way that
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would help their living conditions. In countries like Georgia,
people
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 physically can not afford to pay more
taxes
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 than they are paying at
this
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 moment, the main reason being the low income they receive each month. In similar nations like Georgia,
people
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's main priority is to survive with the resources they have. After considering, even though high
taxes
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 can help a country develop,
this
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 is not always a good idea. In some nations
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 Georgia, if
people
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 had to pay more
taxes
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, they would struggle to afford their basic needs. So, the
government
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 should collect
taxes
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 in a fair way that supports the nation but does not make life harder for its
people
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task response
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coherence
structure
The essay shows both side of the issue.
examples
It gives some real examples from different places.
opinion
It has a clear view or opinion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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