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The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows one method of manufacturing ceramic pots. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture illustrates the process by which ceramic
pots
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 are manufactured. There are eleven steps in the process, from digging raw materials to finishing
pots
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.
The first step is
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 that raw materials are
dogged
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gathered
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,
then
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 it is delivered to
factory
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the factory
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. In
factory
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the factory
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, after crushing raw materials in two machines, it is mixed with water.
Subsequently
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, the mixture is
gone
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placed
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to
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in
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 the moulds and
stayed
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stays
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 in
moulds
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the moulds
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4
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for 4
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-6 hours to
be
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apply
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dry. When
assembled
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the assembled
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 clay
pots
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have been
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are
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 ready, the
pots
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 are
stayed
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kept
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 in oven 1,00 degrees Celsius.
The next step is
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that
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apply
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coloring
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colouring
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; each pot is colored by hand. Once they have been colored, they are sent to
color
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colour
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 firing. After that, it will be ready to use

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pots with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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