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For Centuries , important parts of education have remained such as reading , writing , and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list To what extend do you agree ?

From Yesteryears, communication and
arthematic
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arithmetic
skills
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been
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have
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remain
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remained
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 the foundation of
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children
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children's
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 education.
while
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 some argue that technology is
reeling
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revolutionising
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 around the world and it is mandatory to include
the
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apply
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computer
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skills
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 in
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. I strongly agree with
viewpoints
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the viewpoints
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 because of the merits
it
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they
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brings
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bring
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 to
holistic
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the holistic
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develpoment
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development
 of
children
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 in terms of professional and
carrier wise
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career-wise
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. One of the main
benefit
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benefits
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 of
computer
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skills
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 is that they can open the doors
of
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to
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 job
opportunity
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opportunities
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. When people learn coding or data analysis , which is
high in
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in high
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 demand in the job market , and
make
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makes
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 them competent enough in order to secure a
high paying
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high-paying
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 job .
For example
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 , if
children
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 are exposed to
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computer
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skill
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skills
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 from childhood ,
then
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 there is
higher
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a higher
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chances
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chance
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 that they can either be an
enterprenuer
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entrepreneur
 or tech savvy . A recent
stuy
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study
 shows that people with programming
knowldege
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knowledge
 are good
in
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at
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 critical thinking as well.
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This
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These
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skills
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 not only
helps
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help
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 the
children
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 to boost their confidence but
also
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 improve their intercognitive
skills
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which
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is
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 essential during adulthood. Another
benefits
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benefit
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 is that
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this
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these
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skills
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helps
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help
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 in personal growth.
Children
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 can be independent in doing tasks
such
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 as paying bills online or doing online grocery
with
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shopping with
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 a swipe of
finger tips
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fingertips
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. In the past ,
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it
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 was hard for senior people to learn
this
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 skill
due to
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aging
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ageing
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 and other factors .
As a result
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 , they resist the adoption of technology and
mainly
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are mainly
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 dependent on others to perform certain
task
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tasks
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such
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 as online booking
etc
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, etc
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.
For instance
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 , if students are able to surf the
internet
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internet,
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then
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 they can able to do the task by themselves without the
assist
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assistance
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 of others.
On the other hand
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 , some
argues
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argue
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 that offspring should focus more on verbal
skills
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such
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 as reading and writing and Maths. Because of maths and common
langauge
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language
, one can lay the foundation.
However
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 ,
this
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 syllabus has become obsolete and
world
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the world
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 is moving to the digital era
and
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, and
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 it is essential for
children
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 to have
the
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 elementary level of understanding of
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computer
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computers
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 in order to cope
up
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apply
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with the
cut thoart
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current
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 competition.
To conclude
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 ,
Computer
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skills
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plays
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play
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 a significant role in
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children
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children's
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lifes
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lives
.
Although
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,
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apply
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there are minor
problem
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problems
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 which can be fixed by having a perfect balance in the curriculum .
Therefore
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 ,
Children
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 should be motivated and include
the
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apply
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computer
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skills
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 as
fourth
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a fourth
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skills
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skill
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 in their syllabus.

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Make each paragraph talk one main idea and add a short example to support it.
Check grammar and spelling to make meaning clear.
Write a short plan in the intro and restate it in the conclusion.
The writer shows a clear view and keeps to it.
Some good reasons are given for the main idea.
There is an overall plan with intro, body, and conclusion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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