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Some people think that school children need to learn practical skills such as car maintenance or bank account management along with their academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a discussion about learning subjects at
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. Some
people
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 claim that practical
skills
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 need to be taught at
school
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as well as
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example
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example,
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 how to manage a bank account or
maintaining
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maintain
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 a car. I agree with
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 statement and I believe it should be common in all
type
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types
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 of
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school
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schools
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. The main objects of
the
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education
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 and educational
instutes
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institutions
 are raising young
people
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 skillfully and having independent individuals in society.
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, children have
education
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 in their whole
life
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 and take different classes in a variety of
scince
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science
subject
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subjects
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 to have good jobs and careers. Unfortunately,
this
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 is the point where their actual
life
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start
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starts
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.
Majority
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The majority
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 of
people
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 who have completed their
education
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succesfully
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successfully
,
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apply
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 do not have fundamental knowledge about everyday
life
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.
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, financial literacy is significant for each individual
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however
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 it is not a subject
at
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in
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 most
of
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the
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apply
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school
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schools
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.
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,
people
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 do not know how to spend their incomes properly. In order to handle
this
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 issue, children should learn practical
skills
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 about
life
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 to be ready for the real world.
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, preparing basic meals, fixing the basic things in their home or even making an investment may be in the curriculum in the educational systems
along with
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 the academic subjects. I believe
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 learning these
skills
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 should be seen as
complement
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a complement
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 to the
theorical
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theoretical
 knowledge. In conclusion, adding
praacticals
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practical
skills
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 in the
curriculam
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curriculum
 may be a great
attribution
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addition
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 to
develope
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develop
 the
education
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 and
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a usefull
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usefull
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useful
 method to prepare children
to
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for
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 the real world. In
this
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 way, self-confident and
intellegent indiviuals
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intelligent individuals
 may be raised thanks to
new
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the new
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 educational method.

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task response
State your view clearly at the start and keep one main idea in each paragraph. Add a short plan for what you will say.
coherence
Make a plan for the essay: intro with your stance, 2 or 3 body paragraphs, and a short conclusion.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit together and to move from one point to another.
task response
Give one or two clear examples that fit the idea you talk about and explain how it helps.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use common words and simple phrases.
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Avoid extra ideas that are not needed and keep to the topic.
stance
You take a clear view in favour of adding life skills to school work.
structure
The essay shows an outline with an intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Some links to real life are used, like how money skills help.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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