The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show the production
process
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of chocolate.
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, the
process
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is
categorized
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into ten distinct stages
which
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, which
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illustrate the whole
process
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, including growth and harvesting of
cacao
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pods, the extraction and fermentation of
cacao
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beans,
as well as
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the subsequent transportation and manufacturing, ending with the liquid chocolate making.
To begin
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with,
cacao
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trees are
cultivate
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in regions
such
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us
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S. America, Africa, and Indonesia, where they produce ripe red pods.
Next,
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these pods are
then
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harvested, and the white
cacao
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nibs undergo fermentation
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then
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they are spread in the sun to dry before being collected in large sacks.
Following
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this
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, they are transported to a factory via a train or a lorry. Upon reaching the factory, the seeds commence
into
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further
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processing. They processing. They are roasted at a temperature of 350
degree
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. The reasons for roasting it
is
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are
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to improve
it is
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taste and to prepare it for the next
process
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.

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structure
Fix the flow by using a clear start and end. The piece should have a short intro that says what you will talk about and a short end that repeats the main idea.
language
Use simple and clear words. Check small grammar errors like grow instead of cultivate and such as instead of us.
coherence
Write steps in a simple, fixed order. Do not mix ideas. Keep one path from farm to bar.
content
The plan to tell steps from farm to final product shows you know the topic.
content
You name places where cacao grows, which shows some good detail.
structure
An overall idea of steps is clear, even if the form is short.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrations
  • process
  • harvested
  • fermented
  • develop
  • flavor
  • dried
  • moisture
  • roasted
  • enhances
  • outer shell
  • cracked
  • inner nibs
  • ground
  • liquid
  • pressed
  • separate
  • products
  • dark chocolate
  • milk chocolate
  • tempered
  • molded
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