Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main source in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative source of energy (wind and solar energy) are encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In the contemporary world,
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of fossil fuels
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commonly observed in many nations, leading global warming consequences to increase.
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some countries are
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to switch to generating sustainable
energy
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from wind, solar, and water, I personally believe that the advantages of
this
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action will far exceed the disadvantages.  On the one hand, conventional
energy
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production is the dominant
energy
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source all over the world.
Firstly
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,
fossiel
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fossil
fuels are carbon-based and carbon emission is the most vital thing that
contribute
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contributes
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to global warming. Moving
further
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, usage of non-renewable
energy
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is leading
extreme
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to extreme
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weather conditions, including floods, droughts,
heat
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and heat
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waves.
According to
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a report conducted by Trinity College Dublin,
industrialization
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industrialisation
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and traditional
energy
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consumption increased excessive weather situations
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in
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costal
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coastal
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cities,
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as Latvia, Estonia, and Norway.  
On the other hand
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, some nations are trying to
minimize
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minimise
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environmental
challages
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challenges
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by
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generating eco-friendly
energy
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from wind, solar, and water.
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, the most positive impact is
revitilazation
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revitalisation
in air quality.
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, the infinity of
greenery
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green
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energy
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is
more
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a more
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reliable
energy
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source than fossil fuel, which eventually may become
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finite
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.
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, many Swedish people who understand the consequences of non-renewable
energy
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usage, are
adopt
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adapting
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to renewable
energy
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sources, as they are more convenient and harmless.
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,
accesibility
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accessibility
and convenience to wind and
to
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apply
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water
energy
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more
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are more
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effortless and
easy
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, especially in
costal
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coastal
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areas.  In conclusion, in many countries
coal
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, coal
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,oil,and natural gas are a vital source to provide
energy
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and
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, and
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some of them are
try
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trying
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to allocate to alternative
energy
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power, as they know that the negative impacts
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apply
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outweigh the positive ones and try to combat
climat
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climate
change.

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task response
Plan a short intro that states your view, and a close with one clear line. Give 2 main ideas with simple points and one example for each.
coherence
Use 4 or 5 short para. Each para starts with a clear topic sentence. Use easy link words like also, but, then, so. Check the order of ideas so they fit: why not, how, and result.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Use simple words, and fix errors like fossil fuels, renewable energy, and air quality. Test a sentence aloud to see if it sounds correct.
content
The writer shows a clear view that moving to wind and solar can bring good things.
structure
The essay uses linking phrases to show two sides and a final conclusion.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable energy
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Economic benefits
  • Energy security
  • Energy dependency
  • Infrastructure investment
  • Intermittent nature
  • Sustainable development
  • Technological innovation
  • Renewable energy sector
  • Pollution reduction
  • Job creation
  • Energy diversification
  • Global energy market
  • Geopolitical tensions
  • Supply chain disruptions
  • Energy storage systems
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