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The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
illustrat
Correct your spelling
illustrate
 local government
expenditure
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 in two years
2010
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, 2010
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 and 2015.
Overall
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, the highest percentage of government
expenditure
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 in 2010 and 2015 was on
the
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apply
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education
,
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;
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on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 the
least
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lowest
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percentages
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percentage
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 of
expenditure
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 was on transport. The percentages in 2010 on education
was
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were
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 more than
2015
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in 2015
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 by 3
percent
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per cent
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, as the same
of
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as
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 the education
the
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, the
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 percentages of healthcare ( 1% ), defence ( 3% ), and transport ( 2% ) are getting to less numbers in 2015. On the other side, the government
expediture
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expenditure
 increased
to
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by
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the
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apply
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double
on
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apply
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the interest on borrowing and welfare,
while
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 the pensions
expenditure
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 stayed stable
with
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at
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 19
percent
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per cent
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 in 2010 and 2015.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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