Some people say that it is individual responsibility to protect the environment while others say it is the government's primary role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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should take
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should take
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of view and share my opinion. On the one hand,not only the
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lives in the country and it is not always there
responsibility
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to protect the
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.in other worlds,each person should be responsible of their own place .
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a big place where individuals love to spend there time,but it is sadly to see people throw their trush around,after that blame the
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,talking about saving
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the environment
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environment
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it is
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responsibility
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the more they talk,the more people
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affected.
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can add billboards in the streets saying how much they work
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and still some people don't respect
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also
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they should add
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punishment
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who disagree
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roles. In conclusion
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there is no easy answer to
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tend to believe that both of them should take the
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to save the
environment
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structure
Make 2 or 3 clear ideas and give a small example for each.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words so the text flow is clear and end each idea with a full stop.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar; use correct forms and pronouns.
argument
End with your clear view in one short line.
content
The essay shows you know both sides.
structure
There is a closing line that gives your view.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Individual responsibility
  • Community involvement
  • Personal accountability
  • Governmental intervention
  • Environmental protection
  • Recycling
  • Public transport
  • Conserving resources
  • Spreading awareness
  • CO2 emissions restrictions
  • Waste management protocols
  • Renewable energy
  • Enact and enforce regulations
  • Incentivize individual action
  • Frameworks
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