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Some people think that there are things individuals can do to prevent global climate change. Others believe that action by individuals is useless and irrelevant and that it is only governments and large businesses which can make a different. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In
recently
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 years, global
climate
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change
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 has been a heated issue in
human
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 community all around the world. Some people hold the view that everyone can make
a
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an
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 effort to protect our
climate
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 from getting
worse
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wheras
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whereas
 others believe that it is the
governments
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 should take the
resposibility
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responsibility
 to make a
change
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. As
for
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far
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 as I am concerned, both individuals and our
governments
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 should take
an
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apply
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action regardless of small or big to contribute to global
climate
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change
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. We live
in
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 the earth and we need to live with the environment in harmony, which means that every individual has the
resposibility
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responsibility
 to protect our
climate
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. As every small
change
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 can lead to a huge
change
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, individuals can
change
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 the
climate
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 beginning with a step
action
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apply
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.
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, we can turn off the light when we get out of the room, which can save
the
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power.
Besides
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, we can
also
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 take the subway to work rather than driving to work, which
also
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help
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helps
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 to
decress
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decrease
 the
elimiation
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emission
 of CO2. Compared to individuals, the most dramatic
different
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 is that our
governments
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 possess rights and money, which
contibutes
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contributes
 to making a huge effort to the
climate
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change
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. The
governments
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 can
relise
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make
announcement
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 to force all the people in every
aspects
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such
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, such
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company
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as companies
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,
school
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schools
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, transportation and etc.
to
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, to
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 take part in the protection of
climate
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change
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.
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, in some cities with terrible traffic
jam
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, though the subway has been constructed in these cities, the government has made a
resrtiction
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restriction
of
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on
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 driving cars during
hush
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rush
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 working hours
in
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on
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 weekdays. There are other actions that our Chinese government has taken,
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,
the
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plastic bags are not offered for free to
the
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customers when going shopping, which is a good way to reduce plastic waste because plastic can not be recycled.
To conclude
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, global
climate
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change
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 is an
emegent
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emerging
 issue that
governments
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 should
paid
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 much attention
, but
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 with the effort
together with
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 the government, everyone should
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be concern
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concern
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concerned
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 about and take actions to make a small
change
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 and a better life.

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planning
Plan your writing. Say your view at the end of the intro and again in the conclusion.
grammar
Use simple, correct words. Fix spelling and grammar to make sense.
content
Give 2-3 clear ideas and link them with good links. Connect each idea to the main point.
structure
Put ideas in order: one idea per paragraph. Have a short intro and a short conclusion.
accuracy
Check common mistakes like 'a effort' should be 'an effort', 'decreess' -> 'decrease', 'resposibility' -> 'responsibility'.
ideas
The writer tries to show both sides of the issue and give an opinion.
content
Some real actions are given, such as turning off lights and using the subway.
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