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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two given line graphs demonstrate the
subscriptions
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 to cellular lines and landline phones in four varying
countries
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 between the years 2005 and 2015.
Overall
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, mobile phone
subscriptions
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 in two
countries
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 rose significantly, and the number of phones was higher than in all of the
countries
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 except
Eritrea
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. Despite
this
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, fixed phone usage was only higher than in the
countries
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 of the
UK
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 and Uruguay, and it remained stable between the given years. In 2005, the
UK
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 was the country that used both phones the most.
Then
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, it showed a slight increase in 2006, yet the ratio remained unchanged between 2007 and 2015. Uruguay passed the
UK
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 in 2009 in mobile phone
subscriptions
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, and continued growing and reached the top in 2013. India illustrated a gradual rise. Especially, it was approximately the same as
Eritrea
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, yet
Eritrea
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 was constant. Landline
subscriptions
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 illustrated minor changes in all
countries
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. Particularly, the
UK
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 showed a slight decline from 60 to 50.
Eritrea
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 and India were different at the beginning,
although
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 both of them slightly changed and finished at the same percentage.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words subscriptions, countries, eritrea, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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