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Some people think it w more effective for students to study in grou while others believe that it is better for them to study alone.Discuss both views and give your opinion

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academi
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academic
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, the efficiency of
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 learning
are
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 social concern. Some people think it will be more effective for
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 to
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 will
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discuss
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both sides.
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,
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 will focus on
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study
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 in groups. Group projects are one of the examples of allowing
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to study
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 in groups.
Students
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 can learn teamwork through separating different
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 tasks and researching works, and
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 combine each of their ideas together, which can elevate the learning
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efficiency
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guided
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students
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 thinking.
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,
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 can enhance
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participate
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 in
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 since it is attractive for
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 to
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 with their peers, which can motivate
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student's
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students'
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 learning.
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, there are people
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 that group learning
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 not suitable for educating
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 as it may not cater
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student
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need
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Study
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 alone can follow the learning speed of
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,
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 as individual
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tutorials
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,
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where
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student
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students
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 can learn step by step, and can have questions to their teacher in the difficult on
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.Some
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 may be shy in classes,
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study
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studying
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 alone can help
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 to get better academic performance. In my opinion,
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 think these two ways of
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student
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studying
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 are
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effective
 for
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 to
study
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, but each of
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my
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 only
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be suitable
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 for
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such
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students
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student
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.
Students
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 should explore the way of
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 which can take care
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 needs,so as to enhance their
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 efficiency.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear plan. Start with a short intro that states the topic and your view. Then two body parts, each with one main idea. End with a brief conclusion.
content
Give real, simple examples of group work and solo study. Mention how it helps or can fail.
grammar
Use small, easy words. Check grammar and spellings. Use capital letters at the start of sentences. End with a full stop.
language
Keep lines short. Do not use long run-on phrases. Link ideas with common words like and, but, so.
content
You show both sides of the topic and give your view.
content
You give some good ideas on group work and solo study.
structure
You try to use link words to join ideas.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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