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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advice on whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think here she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend in your letter. Say she will not enjoy going to college, explain why getting job is a good idea? Suggest the type of job that would be suitable.

Dear friend, I am writing to you
for
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with
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 my suggestion that you asked me about
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job
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a job
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 or college. As I know you
had
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apply
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left your college five years
before
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ago
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. If you start your education again, you will not enjoy
because
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it because
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 everyone will be younger than you. Making new friends will be challenging for you because of
age
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the age
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 gap. You should look for a
job
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 for
you
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yourself
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 now. Getting experience will be beneficial for your career development if you really want to improve yourself.
Moreover
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, every
job
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 demands
hands on
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hands-on
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 experience rather than any certification.  We both
have
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apply
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completed our
study
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studies
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 together at Lovely Professional University. Having a
master
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master's
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 degree is not a small thing. You can easily find any
job
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.
However
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, if you look for
software
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a software
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 developer role that would be better for you because you have good knowledge about programming languages like Java, Kotlin, Swift, etc. Kind regards, Sukhdeep

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structure
Try to have one main idea in each paragraph and link ideas with simple words.
language
Use short, clear sentences. Many errors come from long lines.
content
Explain more why not going to college is better, and give a small plan for how to start a job search.
content
The letter has a clear stance and direct tone.
tone
It keeps a friendly tone with a closing.
content
It gives a job idea that fits skills.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressures
  • financial burdens
  • tuition
  • student loans
  • uncertainty
  • work experience
  • earn money
  • practical skills
  • professional network
  • align with interests
  • growth opportunities
  • on-the-job training
  • apprenticeships
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