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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart represents how many
minutes
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 of phone calls people made in the UK across three categories over a 7-year period from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
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, all three call types experienced a significant rise, especially national and international fixed
line
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, and
mobiles
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. Local fixed
line
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 was the most used throughout the period,
while
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mobiles
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 consistently accounted for the smallest proportion. In 1995, people in the UK spent 70
billion
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minutes
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 on local fixed
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line
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lines
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.
This
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 is followed by national and international fixed
lines
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, whose figure was 35
billion
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minutes
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.
Mobiles
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 were considerably lower in popularity
with
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 less than 5
billion
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minutes
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. Telephone calls by all three categories witnessed upward trends until 1999, when the figure of local fixed
line
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 was at its peak, with approximately 90
billion
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minutes
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, which was about twice more
than
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as
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 phone calls made by national and international fixed
lines
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.
Mobiles
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 with around only 20
billion
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minutes
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 were nowhere near compared to the other categories. Since the beginning of the second millennium, the local fixed
line
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 had been losing popularity,
while
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 both national and international fixed
lines
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 and
mobiles
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 grew steadily and were slowly catching up. By the end of the period shown,
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the local-fixed
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local-fixed
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local fixed
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line
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 was
teh
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the
 same as it had
started
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been
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 in 1995, though it was still the most used to make phone calls.
In contrast
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, both national and international fixed
lines
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, and
mobiles
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 experienced a significant rise, with 60
billion
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minutes
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 and 40
billion
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minutes
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, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, mobiles, billion, lines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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